"she is lost, she is forgotten, almost, she believes that everything changes, and only she changed"
This is really interesting, Grace. I really appreciate the use of the text, though I wonder if it ought to be simultaneously presented in english (or whatever language of the place it appears in), because the text does seem really important to accessing the work. Now, it might be that you don't have to subtitle it, maybe it makes sense for the audience to be a little lost at first also, but maybe the english is presented elsewhere in the video to create a bit of a "reveal", so to speak. Naomi Uman does this in her peice "Leche" to nice effect. You have some really interesting stuff going on with the images, the montage, and the sound (and absence of it, at various points).
I'm not exactly sure what to make of the section that seems to take place in a club or bar. It creates a kind of sensation of being lost, but in a really frenetic, panicked way. I really appreciate the aggressiveness of the cutting, and the way you reshape the camera's movement into these repetitive motions that create really interesting visual rhythms.
The next section is more clear, with the text in english that seems to be trying to motivate us to be creative, with the kind of low electronic hum. It gives it kind of a sinister quality, which I like. They feel a little like motivational posters, a little like certain aggressive kinds of advertising that address people's self identity.
The third section that incorporates these along with the pacing back and forth has a lot of indecision in it. If this is functioning as a self portrait, I can see how the first and third sections seem to make more sense when read alongside the text about being lost or forgotten. They have a kind of transient placeless-ness to them. I'm not sure if this is what you were going for or not, but I think it's a productive set of associations. The only thing I think I'd really like to see change in the structure of the piece is to feel that it wraps up somehow. Right now it just ends rather abruptly. Some kind of transition, like the way a concluding paragraph in an essay functions, would maybe be helpful. Not that it has to arrive at some set meaning it's trying to teach the viewer, but something to conclude it rhythmically.
Good work, looking forward to seeing what you come up with for your next project!
the text according to google translate:
ReplyDelete"she is lost, she is forgotten, almost, she believes that everything changes, and only she changed"
This is really interesting, Grace. I really appreciate the use of the text, though I wonder if it ought to be simultaneously presented in english (or whatever language of the place it appears in), because the text does seem really important to accessing the work. Now, it might be that you don't have to subtitle it, maybe it makes sense for the audience to be a little lost at first also, but maybe the english is presented elsewhere in the video to create a bit of a "reveal", so to speak. Naomi Uman does this in her peice "Leche" to nice effect. You have some really interesting stuff going on with the images, the montage, and the sound (and absence of it, at various points).
I'm not exactly sure what to make of the section that seems to take place in a club or bar. It creates a kind of sensation of being lost, but in a really frenetic, panicked way. I really appreciate the aggressiveness of the cutting, and the way you reshape the camera's movement into these repetitive motions that create really interesting visual rhythms.
The next section is more clear, with the text in english that seems to be trying to motivate us to be creative, with the kind of low electronic hum. It gives it kind of a sinister quality, which I like. They feel a little like motivational posters, a little like certain aggressive kinds of advertising that address people's self identity.
The third section that incorporates these along with the pacing back and forth has a lot of indecision in it. If this is functioning as a self portrait, I can see how the first and third sections seem to make more sense when read alongside the text about being lost or forgotten. They have a kind of transient placeless-ness to them. I'm not sure if this is what you were going for or not, but I think it's a productive set of associations. The only thing I think I'd really like to see change in the structure of the piece is to feel that it wraps up somehow. Right now it just ends rather abruptly. Some kind of transition, like the way a concluding paragraph in an essay functions, would maybe be helpful. Not that it has to arrive at some set meaning it's trying to teach the viewer, but something to conclude it rhythmically.
Good work, looking forward to seeing what you come up with for your next project!