I'm curious to know why there were three changes in resolution to your video captures. The shot I loved the most was the one with the rain on window as I had done a similar shot about a year ago and still holds a place dear to me. I didn't really understand why the music stopped on the last shot if that was intentional or a mistake. It makes me feel like perhaps those soothing shots of a rushing river and water droplets on a window are actually an illusion to the stark reality of going to the shower which is boring and mundane. I may be way off on that, but these are my thoughts. heh
Well, 1. this is my first time capturing video and using premiere pro 2. These shots are from a phone and a DSLR 3. yes the music is supposed to stop 4. It is actually supposed to be the difference between a natural resource and how we feel all peaceful and good about it, and then how we use it without even really stopping to think how lucky we are to have it coming out of a faucet all clean and warmed up. Thank you for commenting, and I am glad the rain gave you good feelings.
I like the contrast of the stream and the droplets on the window. Being a future geologist i love outdoI like the contrast of the stream and the droplets on the window. Being a future geologist I love the outdoors. I can see one droplet accumulating into large body of water such as a stream and river. The shower scene I believe is the power of water harness by humans. Your attempt to insert the sound into the video was a good idea, a first timer with video editing you did a great job. ors. One droplet accumi
Good start. I like the back ground music of your video. I think it would be great if you can add ambient sound of river, and later merge the noise of water coming from the shower head.
Primarily, I enjoy the juxtaposition between the presentations of water. Initially, we are introduced to the water in its most natural state (As we can see at least), before being guided to water on the surface of a window; an interaction between natural water and the foreign, artificial world we live in. Finally, the music and natural sound is suddenly cut away to our version of running water (not beautiful, common, with a starkly unnatural sound). The only thing I think should be done to improve upon it is the black borders in the natural shots. I do not know if they are removable, but if they are it would improve the presentation of the idea, I believe.
I like the position you stood in to shoot this. It was different the choice of the pan you did because you didn't follow the most active stream, which would've accentuated the natural flow. I think that pan choice blended well with similar type shots of artificial uses of water.
I really like your water theme. It shows just how easy it is to get access to water which we take for granted. One minor thing that bothered me besides the resolution changes was the text at the beginning is centered too low. Try using your DSLR more often because you can get some really neat shots with the manual focus.
This is a deceptively simple piece, and there are really some complex things you're getting at. I really appreciate that you are showing how both audio and visual material can affect how we respond to something natural, and you've definitely romanticized (or made clear our own romanticism) our relationship to water with the placid piano music and shots of water that evoke nostalgia (which Matt mentions in particular relation to the droplets on the window). The violent break of that nostalgia to highlight our utilitarian use of water, this thing that makes up most of our bodies, is a really clever move.
There are a few things that I think might strengthen these intentions, though, some of which people have already mentioned. The shot of the interior of the window is beautiful and cinematic. You cut just before the zoom, which really draws our attention inward. But the lower resolution of the phone images is impossible to ignore, even if you were to get rid of the black borders. I think it might be possible to consider those "sketch images" that you might consider reshooting with the dslr at a later date, and plugging in. What's positive about those images though, and something you might even emphasize more, is the handheld pan across the water. There's an opportunity here to crank up the nostalgia a notch, I think. What would it be like if you had someone else playing in that stream? Or showing someone watching the water go by in a contemplative way? Also, I think maybe you could crank up the nostalgia through your music selection. What you picked is elegant, but maybe another selection that is a little more over the top in how it emotes would emphasize your point, and make that moment where it cuts out even more jarring. Also, the shot of the shower is very short, and out of focus. I think the shot ought to be a little garish, but to make it feel more intentional, I think a little more time for the viewer to meditate on and integrate the jarring transition would be really satisfying.
I'm curious to know why there were three changes in resolution to your video captures. The shot I loved the most was the one with the rain on window as I had done a similar shot about a year ago and still holds a place dear to me. I didn't really understand why the music stopped on the last shot if that was intentional or a mistake. It makes me feel like perhaps those soothing shots of a rushing river and water droplets on a window are actually an illusion to the stark reality of going to the shower which is boring and mundane. I may be way off on that, but these are my thoughts. heh
ReplyDeleteWell, 1. this is my first time capturing video and using premiere pro 2. These shots are from a phone and a DSLR 3. yes the music is supposed to stop 4. It is actually supposed to be the difference between a natural resource and how we feel all peaceful and good about it, and then how we use it without even really stopping to think how lucky we are to have it coming out of a faucet all clean and warmed up. Thank you for commenting, and I am glad the rain gave you good feelings.
ReplyDeleteI like the contrast of the stream and the droplets on the window. Being a future geologist i love outdoI like the contrast of the stream and the droplets on the window. Being a future geologist I love the outdoors. I can see one droplet accumulating into large body of water such as a stream and river.
ReplyDeleteThe shower scene I believe is the power of water harness by humans. Your attempt to insert the sound into the video was a good idea, a first timer with video editing you did a great job.
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Good start. I like the back ground music of your video. I think it would be great if you can add ambient sound of river, and later merge the noise of water coming from the shower head.
ReplyDeletePrimarily, I enjoy the juxtaposition between the presentations of water. Initially, we are introduced to the water in its most natural state (As we can see at least), before being guided to water on the surface of a window; an interaction between natural water and the foreign, artificial world we live in. Finally, the music and natural sound is suddenly cut away to our version of running water (not beautiful, common, with a starkly unnatural sound).
ReplyDeleteThe only thing I think should be done to improve upon it is the black borders in the natural shots. I do not know if they are removable, but if they are it would improve the presentation of the idea, I believe.
I like the position you stood in to shoot this. It was different the choice of the pan you did because you didn't follow the most active stream, which would've accentuated the natural flow. I think that pan choice blended well with similar type shots of artificial uses of water.
ReplyDeleteI really like your water theme. It shows just how easy it is to get access to water which we take for granted. One minor thing that bothered me besides the resolution changes was the text at the beginning is centered too low. Try using your DSLR more often because you can get some really neat shots with the manual focus.
ReplyDeleteYes that is exactly my meaning Sam! And I appreciate your suggestion.
DeleteThis is a deceptively simple piece, and there are really some complex things you're getting at. I really appreciate that you are showing how both audio and visual material can affect how we respond to something natural, and you've definitely romanticized (or made clear our own romanticism) our relationship to water with the placid piano music and shots of water that evoke nostalgia (which Matt mentions in particular relation to the droplets on the window). The violent break of that nostalgia to highlight our utilitarian use of water, this thing that makes up most of our bodies, is a really clever move.
ReplyDeleteThere are a few things that I think might strengthen these intentions, though, some of which people have already mentioned. The shot of the interior of the window is beautiful and cinematic. You cut just before the zoom, which really draws our attention inward. But the lower resolution of the phone images is impossible to ignore, even if you were to get rid of the black borders. I think it might be possible to consider those "sketch images" that you might consider reshooting with the dslr at a later date, and plugging in. What's positive about those images though, and something you might even emphasize more, is the handheld pan across the water. There's an opportunity here to crank up the nostalgia a notch, I think. What would it be like if you had someone else playing in that stream? Or showing someone watching the water go by in a contemplative way? Also, I think maybe you could crank up the nostalgia through your music selection. What you picked is elegant, but maybe another selection that is a little more over the top in how it emotes would emphasize your point, and make that moment where it cuts out even more jarring. Also, the shot of the shower is very short, and out of focus. I think the shot ought to be a little garish, but to make it feel more intentional, I think a little more time for the viewer to meditate on and integrate the jarring transition would be really satisfying.
Great work!
Thank you for your in depth analysis.
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